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I'm hopeless,
wandering through corridors
I've already wandered,
and thinking of changes
I've already pondered,
Hoping that maybe,
this time, the outcome would be different.

That I would not find myself,
trapped at a dead end,
that you'd give your heart to me,
and my own would mend.

But I've nothing left to give,
my insides left bare,
if it is not me you need,
Please, my heart do spare.

Don't tell me things you don't mean,
things you do not feel,
despite what you may have thought,
my heart is not steal

No longer will I wander,
through corridors I know,
love me completely,
or completely let me go.  
©2004-2009 ~peppermint981
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My heart laid out in words, probably my first time writting completely from that source. A little scary for me. But I wanted to share it. It's not all one rhythm...as it probably should be. This was written about somebody close to me. Comments are welcome. :) Thank you, for taking the time to read my things. Always means a lot.
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Oooh This is a great peice of work. Reminds me of some similiar things I've been through. *stamps a fav on this.*
Beautifully written :D I love the last stanza. Nice to see you posting again!

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that is beautiful....i agree with foolishheart too, the last stanza is really good....overall, its a well written poem with great imagery, and a hell of alot of emotion - as with all the best poems. well done:)

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thank you very much! :hug: :hug: :hug:
thank you very much! :hug: :hug:
thank you very much!! Thank you for making it a favorite! Really means a lot. :hug: :hug:
:cries::cries::sniff:

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